The+bank+robbery

One Saturday morning I heard a loud beep in my ear. Suddenly I woke up to the lovely scent of pancakes. “Yummy” muttered Jordan. “Mmm they were good” gasped Jordan and Laura. “Jordan, Laura who ate all of the pancakes” shouted mum from the other end of the house.

“Not us” they both answered. “Fine, but hurry up and get changed I need to go to the bank”. “Ok we are coming, just a sec” they both replied

Slam, crash went the car door as Laura and Jordan got into the car. “Don’t slam the door’s too hard Jordan” commented Mum. “Yeah Jordan, don’t do that you should know better” Replied Laura

Off they went in the car. “Yay were here” gasped Laura and Jordan. “Right I’m going to the mall” replied Jordan “Oh no you don’t” replied Mum. “Fine” commented Jordan. “Come on Laura” said Jordan. “Coming” muttered Laura. “Where are we going” Laura added. “Were going to the bank remember” yelled Jordan “Ok calm down, calm down” said Laura

They walked in. Suddenly they heard “Give me all of you’re money other wise I will kill all of you. They all thought “Mmm what is going on?” “All of you put you’re hand’s up or I’ll kill all of you if you don’t”. Na” I replied “Who said that” replied the Robber “Hey look over there, grab that golf club” whispered Laura “Ok” replied Jordan “Got it” replied Jordan

“Ha Ha Sucker I’ve got all of the bank’s money and no one can stop me” muttered the robber “Yeah think twice dumb one” giggled Jordan As she was whacking the robber with the golf club over his head. “Sucker” added Laura “Good job Jordan:” commented Mum “Let’s go home” said Mum “Great idea” they both said

So they went home and had a nice refreshing after noon tea.

Did you enjoy reading my story?

It kept me captivated.

My story was a narrative. Did you think the resolution to my problem was realistic? It was funny, but not realistic rather voilent ending to the bank robber and I'd imagine a rather bad headache for days on end after that wack from the golf club.

Do you think i used creative language? YES. Are there any comments you would like to make? Keep nuturing your imagination and keep reading more, proud of your efforts Jordan.